① 这次作文的分数与病灶
GRA 5.5 / overall 6.5 —— 分数卡在语法准确度。老师逐句批改了 acid rain(酸雨)折线图,问题集中在三处:定语、介词、最高级。
② 逐句批改(板书)
| 原句 | 问题 | 改法 |
|---|---|---|
| The line graph illustrates four different sectors of acid rain emissions that measured in millions of tonnes in the UK from 1990 to 2007. | 语义不明(that 从句接不上) | 省略 that、加逗号 → 变成后置定语:emissions, measured in millions of tonnes… |
| …had a downward trend by the timeframe. | 介词不当:by = 直到…为止 | over the timeframe(over 指一段时间的累积变化) |
| …the only sector which emissions experienced a slight rise before falling back. | 定语从句不扎实:emissions 不是谓语动词;which 后面直接接主语不适当 | 把 which 改成 in which 或 where |
| …the electricity, gas and water supply industry was the largest one. | 最高级后面不需要加 one(昨天的作文已经犯过同样的错误) | the largest —— 直接收尾 |
| …started about 2.1 million tonnes… | 介词缺失:start 后面要接 at | started at about 2.1 million tonnes |
可以留用的好句:The figure fell sharply to nearly 1.3 million tonnes by 1997, and continued to drop gradually…(fall sharply to… / continue to do 搭配都对)
③ 分组:静态段怎么写(第三段)
- 大的单独说:EGW(electricity, gas and water supply)先单独亮出来;
- 相似的一起说:用 while 把走向接近的两组并起来;
- 最后一个做结尾。
④ 第四段讲趋势:增减与时间
| 想表达 | 用什么 |
|---|---|
| 增加到 / 减少到某个数 | to —— fell to 1.3 million tonnes |
| 增加/减少的量(名词用法) | increase / decrease + of |
| 增加了多少 | by |
| 单独年份 | in(in 1990) |
| 直到某年 | by(by 2007) |
| 大段时间 | over(over the period) |
| 某个区间 | between(between 1990 and 2007) |
⑤ 发音拆解(本课板书)
| 词 | 要点 |
|---|---|
| media /ˈmiːdiə/ | 舌尖顶在上门牙 |
| scroll through TikTok | R 音 = 嘴唇往前 + 舌尖后卷(板书:10 倍唇 + 舌尖) |
| about /əˈbaʊt/ | 舌身微微隆起,嘴巴放松,别"舌头乱动" |
| pony / own / stone | 词尾的 o 音加语调 |
| egg / sit / dance / calendar / fast / cabbage / dipping sauce(酱) | 口型对照练习(元音不同,嘴形不同) |
⑥ 清浊辅音:s 后面的 p 会"浊化"
unvoiced consonant 清辅音(p)/ voiced consonant 浊辅音(b):声带震动就是浊辅音。板书提醒:speak / express / up 里的 p,在 s 后面听起来接近 b —— 声音往前靠,舌尖送到上门牙。
⑦ 连读小样(把故事说得像英语)
- lying on → "lyin' on"(吞掉 g,直接连上 on)
- scrolling → "scroll-ing",c 与 R 连在一起读
- 一遍遍读这三句,直到不用想:
I was lying on my sofa, scrolling through TikTok.